You had a nice intro and conclusion there. I understand you ideas of controlling people's personal lives. I think that you could have expanded all the support ideas you got more, because your ideas did not make through that depth to my brain and about your perspective. Still, you got a unique voice there.
Good intro,the question as a hook is very normal, and it worked good enough to catch my attention. And the end is also normal and good nothing to say here
Dear Johnny T.,
ReplyDeleteYou had a nice intro and conclusion there. I understand you ideas of controlling people's personal lives. I think that you could have expanded all the support ideas you got more, because your ideas did not make through that depth to my brain and about your perspective. Still, you got a unique voice there.
Emily L.
Good intro,the question as a hook is very normal, and it worked good enough to catch my attention. And the end is also normal and good nothing to say here
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